D_C_N: Welp, I've seen enough of the phantom menace to know that someone slapsticking their way into accidentally defeating an army isn't very entertaining, lol, may just avoid it entirely then.
Although, it may be mildly entertaining if she tripped and knocked the antagonist over a cliff or something... the possibilities. ;)
D_C_N: For the purpose of the next segment of this story, which I have decided on writing, and seeing as this... I dunno, series? I guess, is being written with the people here on this booru in mind, I wanted to ask:
Would it be breakingly out of character for Katia to say, kill, like, an actual person?
D_C_N: Thank you for spending the time to take such an in depth look at my writing, and don't feel bad for the critiques, because, if I do something poorly, and no one says anything, I can't know to not do it anymore.
This story was essentially filler, er, well, I wanted to explain the situation and the settings, seeing as I didn't do that at all in the last one, and perhaps it would have worked out with the preceding and following segments included, but I didn't do that. I just put it out on it's own, so it likely was boring. The next part, if there is one, should be more exciting, I just wanted to lay out the groundwork and didn't know the best way to do that.
Thank you again for giving me this feedback, I feel like hearing the flaws my writing has is incredibly important in my efforts to remove them, and also, even though there was alot of negative points this time it's really a boost to see someone taking my writing seriously, like it's 'real' not to mention, once again, if there were no negative comments I could never really improve.
So thank you once more, it's really great, and really helpfull, and just, super appreciated
D_C_N: The follow up to my previous story, hpopefully I was able to fix some of the flaw that the last one had here, and uh, feedback is welcome once again, because, well, I can't improve if no one tells me what I'm doing good or bad. Thanks
D_C_N: I'm working on a second story, hopefully without the rush to finish by halloween I can avoid the flaws this story had, though, in order to explain and make it less confusing, I will need to focus a bit more on my own stuff, distracting from Katia a bit, which is not ideal, but I'll try to keep her the star as much as possible.
D_C_N: Thank you so much for the feed back first of all ( not sure whats up with the link, the stories still there, but the trscking stats are reset, so I put a new link) and uh, just thanks. And thinking of bandits and guards is pretty much appropriate. Thats just kinda what they are. Most the characters, or, well, all of them, were underdeveloped, probably because I just made most of them up for this story as I was writting it, with the exception of Sera,but she even was only put in because I thought maybe, it be better if I had one of my female charaters trying to save Katia instead of just the man. So, thanks again, and thanks a lot, that feedback pretty much made my week.
D_C_N: I tried to put it on google docs, but because I am on my tablet, I can only use docs in app form, so, My story is on there, but there is no way to link it here, that I can see... besides, this is my first time sharimg with people I don't really know, so the extra time to decide if I can improve anything is sorta nice.
D_C_N: Everything is ready, I just gotta wait for the 12 hour ban on posting that fanfic has for new users (and try not to get cold feet in those twelve hours) and I'll be ready, well, as ready as I can be, to share my story
D_C_N: Thanks for all the help, this will be the first time I've shared my writing with anyone other than close friends and family, so I'm eager to try it... and a fair bit nervous as well.
D_C_N: So if I wrote prequel fanfic on a piece of paper, then posted a picture of that I could link it? I'll try that, thanks for responding so quickly by the way.
D_C_N: Quick question, I have a fan fiction, that I am nearly done with, it has Katia, some characters from my own book, and a (rather poor) halloween theme, so if I upload that document the same way as a picture, will that work? It's a word document on my tablet, and since I can't share images, being a crap artist and all, I would like to share this.
D_C_N: No idea what to tag this as, but anyways I got into the blackops beta. Saw the weapon editor, and now I and clearly the most feared soldier on the field... I spent waaaay too long on this. Couldn't get the eyes quite right, oh well.
D_C_N: Lets go with that, that's really why he has a question mark for a face, not because I failed completely to draw a regular person, no, not that at all
D_C_N: I wanted to draw Katia interacting with one of my own characters, ironically though, I could only draw her, and after many attempts, gave up on drawing Cailan, I got mad and drew a question mark, then, being an idiot, filled out the speech bubbles
D_C_N: me and some friends were talking about elder scrolls online, one of them called the class he wanted to be an "imperial cat wizard" i made this shortly after.
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Although, it may be mildly entertaining if she tripped and knocked the antagonist over a cliff or something... the possibilities. ;)
Would it be breakingly out of character for Katia to say, kill, like, an actual person?
This story was essentially filler, er, well, I wanted to explain the situation and the settings, seeing as I didn't do that at all in the last one, and perhaps it would have worked out with the preceding and following segments included, but I didn't do that. I just put it out on it's own, so it likely was boring. The next part, if there is one, should be more exciting, I just wanted to lay out the groundwork and didn't know the best way to do that.
Thank you again for giving me this feedback, I feel like hearing the flaws my writing has is incredibly important in my efforts to remove them, and also, even though there was alot of negative points this time it's really a boost to see someone taking my writing seriously, like it's 'real' not to mention, once again, if there were no negative comments I could never really improve.
So thank you once more, it's really great, and really helpfull, and just, super appreciated