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2304: artist:POMA crossover mage_hands monochrome sketch text very_casually_underdressed

artist:POMA crossover mage_hands monochrome sketch text very_casually_underdressed
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MetalC0Mmander: TAG YOURSELF AS THE ARTIST POMA!

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Geravind: Nice!
She's not showing "the end" actually, she's just expecting a hug! =^_^=

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POMA: @MetalC0Mmander: I will sure do it. Right after I do something worthy.
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MetalC0Mmander: @POMA: So can we not play the "who's doing the more work" game and can you just agree to do it... It just take 2 seconds and if you don't know how to do it I can show you.

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Kewot_Rokar: Hopefully, we never have to see this.

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AMKitsune: @Kewot_Rokar: I just hope that when it finally does end, she'll actually have clothes. Just a weird little personality quirk of mine XD

244: artist:justme character:Katia_Managan despair frowning sad tears

artist:justme character:Katia_Managan despair frowning sad tears

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Armored-Struggle-Wagon: d'awwww, poor little Katia :c

2279: character:your_weird_OC fanfiction lined_paper_club photo text

character:your_weird_OC fanfiction lined_paper_club photo text
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D_C_N: Welp... here ya go
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D_C_N: Any feedback would be great, erm, I'd like to make a career out of my writing, so knowing what I do well, or poorly, is important

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AMKitsune: @D_C_N: Ok, so I've had a read of this and wanted to start by saying that the environments were extremely well described. I could really feel the darkness closing in on the characters in the forest and the expansiveness of the plains. This however brings me onto my second point. With the exception of Katia, I had a hard time keeping track of the the names of the other characters, places, possibly factions if there were any. It may well just be me, but I found the introduction of so many new names in such a relatively short space to be a bit overwhelming. Because of this, I went through the story pretty much thinking of the characters in terms of 'group of bandits who kidnapped Katia' and 'bunch of guards giving chase', and even then, I sometimes found myself mixing up different characters. I suspect that the reason I've had this problem is a combination of the facts that most of the characters have similarly 'fantasy sounding' names (like the sorts of names you get in harry potter and lord of the rings) and the lack of time given to introduce them as separate characters.

You also did a good job of not letting any characters become the 'favourite' by making them 'too perfect' in any way (a problem that many fanfictions suffer from). I was really pleased (and pleasantly surprised) to see Katia written not as a 'damsel in distress' or the 'all conquering protagonist' but as an actual person as she appears in the comic itself. It may not sound like much, but I think it does so much to help make the story more believable and immersive (which is surely one of the best things a story can be, right?).

Honestly, this felt like a small slice of a much bigger story. Sure there were a couple of typo's here and there and a few sparse grammatical errors, but for the most part, it was fantastically written. the way it's written made it feel like I was reading an excerpt from a larger novel.

To summarise, an overall fantastic piece of writing that I feel was only let down by the lack of time devoted to introducing the individual characters (in a story this short with this many characters, I can see how that may be difficult to pull off though).
(Also, I notice that the link doesn't work any more. Did you take the story down?)
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D_C_N: Thank you so much for the feed back first of all ( not sure whats up with the link, the stories still there, but the trscking stats are reset, so I put a new link) and uh, just thanks. And thinking of bandits and guards is pretty much appropriate. Thats just kinda what they are. Most the characters, or, well, all of them, were underdeveloped, probably because I just made most of them up for this story as I was writting it, with the exception of Sera,but she even was only put in because I thought maybe, it be better if I had one of my female charaters trying to save Katia instead of just the man. So, thanks again, and thanks a lot, that feedback pretty much made my week.
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D_C_N: I'm working on a second story, hopefully without the rush to finish by halloween I can avoid the flaws this story had, though, in order to explain and make it less confusing, I will need to focus a bit more on my own stuff, distracting from Katia a bit, which is not ideal, but I'll try to keep her the star as much as possible.

2303: Cloak_of_Gray_Tomorrow Dexterity artist:POMA character:Katia_Managan misuse_of_tail modern_clothing monochrome sketch very_casually_underdressed

Cloak_of_Gray_Tomorrow Dexterity artist:POMA character:Katia_Managan misuse_of_tail modern_clothing monochrome sketch very_casually_underdressed

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POMA: Again bits of dump of my pratice. Just say a word and ill stop posting these sumb sketches.

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Geravind: On the first picture her expression is inconsistent a little: not all facial details follow one particular emotion, but... ouch! Her neck makes it clear -- why. And her fur looks like feathers mostly.
The second picture is almost purrfect!
On the third picture there is only one unnecessary line on her occiput.
Don't stop!

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Kewot_Rokar: YES! A KHAJIIT USING THEIR TAIL AS A TOOL!

2283: artist:Mediocre_Scrublord character:Katia_Managan double_amputee modern_clothing

artist:Mediocre_Scrublord character:Katia_Managan double_amputee modern_clothing

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Tahrey: i ... just ...

what?

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Mediocre_Scrublord: It's a long story.

2291: artist:Filthypaladin braids character:Katia_Managan character:Little_Katia happy magnus

artist:Filthypaladin braids character:Katia_Managan character:Little_Katia happy magnus

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Filthypaladin: Suffice to say, the good time didn't last!

Spoilers: the horse probably died. =D
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TemporaryFace: The biggest thing she's ever steered.

Not to be confused with the biggest thing she's ever ridden.

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CaptainLackwit: @TemporaryFace: I'm not convinced it isn't.

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Kewot_Rokar: Beautiful

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Tahrey: spoiler: is wooden figurine of top front part of horse from outside a tack shop.

2299: Cloak_of_Gray_Tomorrow character:Katia_Managan portrait smiling

Cloak_of_Gray_Tomorrow character:Katia_Managan portrait smiling
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MetalC0Mmander: Well this looks akward.

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AMKitsune: I like to imagine that a complete stranger has just told her that they love her and want to always be with her, snuggle up with her, protect her, give her a place to live, feed her... You know, all the usual well meaning but ultimately creepy stuff that fans come up with.
Seriously, coming from someone you know would be somewhat ok, but from her perspective, all her fans would simply be random weirdo's. (and let's face it, we're all random weido's in one way or another XD)

2296: artist:Mediocre_Scrublord character:Katia_Managan modern_clothing song_and_dance

artist:Mediocre_Scrublord character:Katia_Managan modern_clothing song_and_dance

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Man_Of_Mer: I'd tap that :D *BA-DUM TISH*

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tronn: "The most exotic dance"

2292: Katia's_wizard_robe Rick_and_Morty character:Katia_Managan grotesque portrait teeth

Katia's_wizard_robe Rick_and_Morty character:Katia_Managan grotesque portrait teeth

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Filthypaladin: Katia:"A-awww geez, Aggy!"

2293: Bosmer Prequel:_Precede artist:Mediocre_Scrublord bed blood boat impure_thoughts

Bosmer Prequel:_Precede artist:Mediocre_Scrublord bed blood boat impure_thoughts

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Kazerad: I removed the other version of this because they were basically the same image, only this one is sexier.

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KillerfishSG: He looks like he has boobs!

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Mediocre_Scrublord: they're manly elf pecs
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